My hobby is collecting cactuses. I

My hobby is collecting cactuses. I started collecting them when I was young (câu này nếu có thời gian cụ thể thì sẽ hay hơn, vd I started collecting them when I was 8 years old). I first knew about cactuses when I was walking in the park with my mother.( đã là một câu hoàn chỉnh nên phải chấm chứ không được phẩy) I accidentally saw a plant (dùng plant chính xác hơn dùng tree) which had many thorns and no leaves at all. I was told by my father that cactuses are very strong plants, for they can live well even in dry deserts (hoặc là for they can survive even in dry deserts, dùng “in” chứ không dùng “on”, for ở đây có nghĩa là “vì”, ý “living without water” có vẻ trùng với ý “live in dry deserts” nên lược bỏ cho đoạn văn súc tích hơn). They’re usually planted in houses to remind people to always try their best (try their best = cố gắng hết sức) to overcome difficulties. >Chị không hiểu ý câu “I feel that sense of fun from cactus” là gì nên bỏ qua câu này, “sense of fun” là hài hước, không dùng cho vật được< Since then, I started collecting them. I usually go to plants stores to buy them (dùng “buy them outside” ở đây là không chính xác, nếu muốn dùng cụm từ này thì phải nói là I usually go buy them outside the city …v…v), classify (sort ít được sử dụng, dùng classify thông dụng và chính xác hơn, vẫn cùng nghĩa là “phân loại”) them by their shapes and colors then put them in the small boxes beside the windows (khi viết câu liệt kê, chỉ dùng and khi đã liệt kê tới thành phần cuối cùng, vd như I bring bananas, grapes, peaches AND apples to the picnic, trong trường hợp đoạn văn của em dùng “then” (rồi, và rồi) sẽ hay hơn dùng and). My friends and relatives (relative là họ hàng thân thuộc, nghĩa chính xác hơn acquaintance (người quen)) know I love my collection very much (không đặt very trước động từ), so they always buy cactuses as gifts for me after their travellings (câu em viết sai và không có nghĩa). So far, my collection has been very big and hopefully it will be bigger in the future. (câu cuối cùng của em lặp lại từ hope, không hay và đồng thời cũng không dính dáng tới chủ đề đoạn văn là my hobbies nên chị lược bỏ).

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My hobby is collecting cactuses. I started collecting them when I was young (this sentence if there is a specific time, the cooler, e.g. I started collecting them when I was 8 years old). I first knew about cactuses when I was walking in the park with my mother.( was a complete sentences should have periods rather than be semicolons) I accidentally saw a plant (a plant more accurately using the tree) which had many thorns and no leaves at all. I was told by my father that cactuses are very strong plants, for they can live well even in dry deserts (either for they can survive even in dry deserts, use "in" rather than using "on", for here means "because", the "living without water" seems to coincide with my "live in dry deserts" should be removed for a more concise paragraphs). They're usually planted in houses to remind people to always try their best (try their best = the best) to overcome difficulties. > I don't understand the sentence "I feel that sense of fun from cactus" what should ignore this sentence, "sense of fun" is humor, not for things that are < Since then, I started collecting them. I usually go to plants stores to buy them (using the "buy them outside" here is not correct, if want to use this phrase to say is I usually go buy them outside the city ... v.. etc.), classify (sort of less is used, use the classify and is more accurate, still the same meaning "Classifieds") them by their shapes and colors then put them in the small boxes beside the windows (when writing list, only use and when you have listed to the final component, e.g. as I bring bananas, grapes, peaches AND apples to the picnic, in case your paragraphs using "then" (now and then) would be better than using and). My friends and relatives (relative is relative familiarity, meaning more accurate acquaintance (acquaintance)) know I love my collection very much (not very in front of verbs), so they always buy cactuses as gifts for me after their travellings (the sentence I wrote is wrong and has no meaning). So far, my collection has been very big and hopefully it will be bigger in the future. (the last sentence I repeat from hope, not or and no subject to paragraphs is my hobbies so I removed).

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我的爱好是收集仙人掌。我开始收集他们，当我年轻的时候（CâU nàY NếU CóTHờ我吉安CụTHểTHì的ẽ干草HơN，VD我开始收集，当我8岁的时候）。我第一次知道仙人掌当我和妈妈在公园散步。（đãLàMộT CâU和àN CHỉNH Nên pHả我CHấm CHứKHôngđượC pHẩY）我无意中看到一个植物（Dùng植物CHíNH XáC HơN Dù树），有很多荆棘和没有在所有的叶子。我告诉我的父亲，仙人掌具有很强的植物，他们甚至可以在干燥的沙漠生活（HOặC Là他们甚至可以在干燥的沙漠，在Dùng”“CHứKHông Dùng”，为ởđâY CóNGHĩLà“Vì”，ý”生活没有水的“CóVẻTRù纳克Vớ我ý”生活在干燥的沙漠，“NêN LượC B Oỏ首席人事官đạN VăN SúC TíCH Hơn）。他们通常种植在房屋提醒人们总是尽力（努力= CốGắng HếT SứC）克服困难。> CHịKHông嗨ểUýCâU”我觉得乐趣感从仙人掌”我àGìNêN Bỏ作为CâàY U N，“有趣”，我àHà我感ướC，KHông Dùng首席人事官VậTđượC＜从那时起，我开始收集它们。我通常去植物商店买（Dùng”买外”ởđâY LàKHông CHíNH XáC，NếU亩ốN Dùng CụM TừNà0ìpHả我Nó我à我通常去买他们在城市……V V），分类（排序íTđượC的ửDụng，Dùng分类日ông Dụ纳克VàCHíNH XáC Hơn，VẫN Cùng NGHĩLà“pHâN罗ạ我”）他们的形状和颜色，然后把它们放在小盒子旁边的Windows（KHI VIếT CâU锂ệT Kê，CHỉDùNG和川崎đã李ệT KêTớ我àNH pHầN铜ố我ùng，VD NHư带给我的香蕉，葡萄，桃子和苹果去野餐，仲量联行TRường HợPđOạN VăN CủEM Dù纳克“然后”（RồI，VàRồ我的ẽ干草）HơN Dùng）。我的朋友和亲戚（相关信用àHọHàng THâN四ộC，天然气水合物ĩCHíNH XáC HơN熟人（NGườ我让））知道我爱我的收藏非常（KHôngđặ不TRướCđộNG Từ），所以他们总是买仙人掌作为礼物送给我经过他们的是（CâU EM VIếT西五àKHông CóNGHĩ一）。到目前为止，我收集已经非常大，希望它在未来将更大。（CâU铜ố我ùng CủEM P L Lặạ我不ừ希望，KHông干草Vàđồng THờ我ũng KHông DíNH DáNG Tớ我CHủđềđOạN VăN Là我的爱好NêN CHịLượC Bỏ）。